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I think Marian has a terrific “voice” and tone in her newsletter. It’s very personal and enthusiastic and you immediately get a sense of who she is. I also like that it begins right away with useful information (e.g. “The One Bag Commitment”).
In terms of improvements, the first thing I’d do is make the typeface bigger — it’s TINY!
Second is to give it a real name, not just “Adventures in Good Company Newsletter.” That’s all about the company rather than something that the reader may be interested in. So name it, like it’s a magazine.
Lastly, while it has a great, personal tone, it doesn’t appear to be “from” anyone. There’s no name or signature within; it just starts out talking. New readers and prospective clients need more context, so make sure to sign each newsletter with your name and title.
Thanks for playing Marian!!